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CalebHayes Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 01:24 PM
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Could someone edit my letter before I send it out?
Edited on Fri Jun-25-04 01:51 PM by cqhayes
have some fun with it if you like.

Thanks a lot.

I'm making constant changes to it you can check it out at http://anti-bush.blogspot.com

The Bush administration is a flat out incompetent administration. If there is some kind of Viagra for failing and incompetent administrations then someone needs to hook Bush and Chaney up with that stuff. They can't seem to tell us the truth, or even come up with a decent plan for this country or Iraq for that matter. They also seem to constantly flip-flop on issues. A statement is made on a major issue and then next thing you know they have made a 180 degree change in policy. Let me give you a few examples of how incompetent this administration is:

Thomas B. Griffith, President Bush's nominee for the federal appeals court in Washington, has been practicing law in Utah without a state law license for the past four years, according to Utah state officials. This is a serious position. The federal appeals court is no little dinky winkie court, it actually matters. Maybe it's just me, but I think that it might be important to have a law license if your going to be on the federal appeals court.

Have you had to fill up your gas tank lately? I bet you have, and I bet you have paid up wards of $2.00 a gallon for your gas. Now only an incompetent president would think that the economy is doing great when you are paying over $2.00 a gallon for gas. It is obvious that he does not have to fill up the tank on his limo.

And finally, only an incompetent president would send our troops to die in Iraq without proof that they could harm us in any way, when the enemy we should really be worried about is Al Quida and Bin Laden. Kids are dying in Iraq for no reason. No weapons of mass destruction, no Saddam/Al Quida like, we are not being welcomed in Iraq. George Bush is an incompetent president.


Caleb Hayes
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mopinko Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 01:33 PM
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1. ok
If there is some kind of Viagra for failing and incompetent administrations then someone needs to hook Bush and Chaney up with that stuff.

>If there is some kind of Viagra for failing and incompetent administrations then it should be administered intraveniously to Bush and Chaney starting right now.

have paid up wards of $2.00
> upwards is one word
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CalebHayes Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 01:38 PM
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I'm surprised thats all you got. But thanks a lot.
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CalebHayes Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 01:38 PM
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2. self deleted
Edited on Fri Jun-25-04 01:38 PM by cqhayes
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RebelOne Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 01:46 PM
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4. Hate to tell you this, but upwards is incorrect.
It is upward, no s. Upwards is the British style
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leyton Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 01:46 PM
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5. spelling is intravenously
and also, I'd replace 'starting right now' with something like 'immediately'. Not to be picky but it just flows better grammatically.
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sadiesworld Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 01:42 PM
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3. Nice letter.
flat-out
Cheney
Al Qaida (altho I've seen several spellings used & yours might be OK)
link, not like (in last paragraph)
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LisaM Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 01:46 PM
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6. Change "if your" going to
to if "you're going to".
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Goldmund Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 01:48 PM
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7. "have a law license if your going to be on the federal..."
you're
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RebelOne Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 01:51 PM
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8. Here is your letter. I made a few nit-picky changes.
Edited on Fri Jun-25-04 01:51 PM by RebelOne
The Bush administration is a flat-out incompetent administration. If there is some kind of Viagra for failing and incompetent administrations, then someone needs to hook Bush and Chaney up with that stuff. They can't seem to tell us the truth, or even come up with a decent plan for this country or Iraq for that matter. They also seem to constantly flip-flop on issues. A statement is made on a major issue and then next thing you know, they have made a 180-degree change in policy. Let me give you a few examples of how incompetent this administration is:

Thomas B. Griffith, President Bush's nominee for the federal appeals court in Washington, has been practicing law in Utah without a state law license for the past four years, according to Utah state officials. This is a serious position. The federal appeals court is no little dinky winky court, it actually matters. Maybe it's just me, but I think that it might be important to have a law license if you're going to be on the federal appeals court.

Have you had to fill up your gas tank lately? I bet you have, and I bet you have paid upward of $2.00 a gallon for your gas. Now, only an incompetent president would think that the economy is doing great when you are paying over $2.00 a gallon for gas. It is obvious that he does not have to fill up the tank on his limo.

And finally, only an incompetent president would send our troops to die in Iraq without proof that they could harm us in any way, when the enemy we should really be worried about is Al Quida and Bin Laden. Kids are dying in Iraq for no reason. No weapons of mass destruction, no Saddam/Al Quida link, we are not being welcomed in Iraq. George Bush is an incompetent president.


Caleb Hayes
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CalebHayes Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 01:55 PM
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9. thoughts?
The Bush administration is a flat out incompetent administration. If there is some kind of Viagra for failing and incompetent administrations then it should be administered intraveniously to Bush and Cheney starting immediately. They can't seem to tell us the truth, or even come up with a decent plan for this country or Iraq for that matter. They also seem to constantly flip-flop on issues. A statement is made on a major issue and then next thing you know they have made a 180 degree change in policy. Let me give you a few examples of how incompetent this administration is:

Thomas B. Griffith, President Bush's nominee for the federal appeals court in Washington, has been practicing law in Utah without a state law license for the past four years, according to Utah state officials. This is a serious position. The federal appeals court is no little dinky winkie court, it actually matters. Maybe it's just me, but I think that it might be important to have a law license if you're going to be on the federal appeals court.

Have you had to fill up your gas tank lately? I bet you have, and I bet you have paid upward of $2.00 a gallon for your gas. Now only an incompetent president would think that the economy is doing great when you are paying over $2.00 a gallon for gas. It is obvious that he does not have to fill up the tank on his limo.

And finally, only an incompetent president would send our troops to die in Iraq without proof that they could harm us in any way, when the enemy we should really be worried about is Al Quida and Bin Laden. Kids are dying in Iraq for no reason. No weapons of mass destruction, no Saddam/Al Quida link, we are not being welcomed in Iraq. George Bush is an incompetent president.


Caleb Hayes
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sendero Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 02:03 PM
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11. This would be my version...
.... I did take a lot of liberties tho, your mileage may vary.

The Bush administration is flat out incompetent. If there is some kind of Viagra for failing and incompetent leaders then it should be administered intraveniously to Bush and Cheney starting immediately. They can't seem to tell us the truth, or even come up with a decent plan for this country or Iraq for that matter. They also constantly flip-flop on issues. 180 degree reversals of policy are commonplace. Let me give you a few examples of how incompetent this administration is:

Thomas B. Griffith, President Bush's nominee for the federal appeals court in Washington, has been practicing law in Utah without a state law license for the past four years, according to Utah state officials. This is a serious position. The federal appeals court is no trivial court, it actually matters. Maybe it's just me, but I think that it might be important to have a law license if you're going to be on the federal appeals court.

Have you had to fill up your gas tank lately? I bet you have, and I bet you have paid close to $2.00 a gallon or more for your gas. Now only an incompetent president would think that the economy is doing great when you are paying over $2.00 a gallon for gas. It is obvious that he does not have to fill up the tank on his limo.

And finally, only an incompetent president would send our troops to die in Iraq without proof that they could harm us in any way, when the enemy we should really be worried about is Al Quida and Bin Laden. Kids are dying in Iraq for no reason. No weapons of mass destruction, no Saddam/Al Quida link, and we have introduced instability in Iraq that may take years or even decades to remedy.

George Bush is an incompetent president, it is hard to identify a single significant success he can call his own.
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CalebHayes Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 02:34 PM
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13. I like this one
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wryter2000 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 02:00 PM
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10. Here
Edited on Fri Jun-25-04 02:01 PM by wryter2000
The Bush administration is a flat-out incompetent administration. If there is some kind of Viagra for failing and incompetent administrations, then someone needs to hook Bush and ChaneyCheney up with that stuff. <split this sentence into two They can't seem to tell us the truth. And they have no plan for this country, let alone IraqThey can't seem to tell us the truth, or even come up with a decent plan for this country or Iraq for that matter.> They also delete these words seem to constantly flip-flop on issues. A statement is made replace this with, They'll make a statement on a major issue and then next thing you know they have made a change this to then immediately make a 180 degree change in policy. Let me give you a few examples of how incompetent this administration is:

Thomas B. Griffith, President Bush's nominee for the federal appeals court in Washington, has been practicing change to has practiced law in Utah without a state law license for the past four years, according to Utah state officials. This is a serious position. The federal appeals court is no little dinky-winkie court, it actually matters. Maybe it's just me, but I think that it might be important to have a law license if your going to be on the federal appeals court.

Have you had to fill up your gas tank lately? I bet you have, and I bet you have paid up wards of change to over $2.00 a gallon delete this. what else do you fill your tank with? for your gas. delete this Now only an incompetent president would think that the economy is doing great when change to when gas costs so much you are paying over $2.00 a gallon for gas. Change to it's It is obvious that he does not have to fill up the tank on his limo.

And finally, only an incompetent president would send our troops to die in Iraq without proof that sounds like the troops could harm us. Change to when Iraq posed no threat to us. they could harm us in any way. Then, end sentence here and start new sentence with The enemy we, when the enemy we should really be worried about is Al Quida Qaeda and Bin Laden. Kids are dying in Iraq for no reason. No weapons of mass destruction, no Saddam/Al Quida like s/b Al Qaeda link, we are not being welcomed in Iraq. George Bush is an incompetent president. how about ending with George W. Bush is a disgrace.

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wryter2000 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 02:06 PM
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12. Heck that wasn't clear
The Bush administration is a flat-out incompetent administration. If there is some kind of Viagra for failing and incompetent administrations, then someone needs to hook Bush and Cheney up with that stuff. They can't tell us the truth. They have no decent plan for this country, let alone Iraq. They also flip-flop on issues. They'll make a statement on a major issue and then follow that with a 180 degree change in policy. Let me give you a few examples of how incompetent this administration is:

Thomas B. Griffith, President Bush's nominee for the federal appeals court in Washington, has practiced law in Utah without a state law license for the past four years, according to Utah state officials. This is a serious position. The federal appeals court is no little dinky-winkie court, it actually matters. Maybe it's just me, but I think that it might be important to have a law license if your going to be on the federal appeals court.

Have you had to fill up your gas tank lately? I bet you have, and I bet you have paid over $2.00 a gallon. Only an incompetent president would think that the economy is doing great when you are paying so much for gas. It's obvious that he doesn't have to fill up the tank on his limo.

And finally, only an incompetent president would send our troops to die in Iraq without proof that Iraq posed any threat to us.
the enemies we should really be worried about are Al Qaeda and Bin Laden. Kids are dying in Iraq for no reason. No weapons of mass destruction, no Saddam/Al Qaeda link, we are not being welcomed in Iraq. George Bush is a disgrace.

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TrustingDog Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 02:42 PM
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14. i don't get the connection: Viagra and telling the truth...
?
perhaps you can reword it tosomething like 'screwing us over 24/7' to relate to the Viagra word.
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CalebHayes Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 02:46 PM
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15. I'm trying to use the word "incompetent" all the time to try to tie to ..
"Viagra". Maybe I'm the only one that makes that connections with the words "incompetent" and "Viagra."
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TrustingDog Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 02:51 PM
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17. 'impotent' may work better.
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TrustingDog Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 02:51 PM
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18. gimme a minute, I'll see if I can work something out.
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TrustingDog Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 02:53 PM
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20. how's this?
The Bush administration is flat out impotent in regards to properly representing what We the People and America stands for.

blah blah..etc.
If there is some kind of Viagra for ....
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CalebHayes Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 02:49 PM
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16. okay this is being printed, now is your last chance if you would like...
Edited on Fri Jun-25-04 02:50 PM by cqhayes
to add something.

The Bush administration is flat out incompetent. If there is some kind of Viagra for failing and incompetent leaders then it should be administered intraveniously to Bush and Cheney starting immediately. They can't seem to tell us the truth, or even come up with a decent plan for this country or Iraq for that matter. They also constantly flip-flop on issues. 180 degree reversals of policy are commonplace. Let me give you a few examples of how incompetent this administration is:

Thomas B. Griffith, President Bush's nominee for the federal appeals court in Washington, has been practicing law in Utah without a state law license for the past four years, according to Utah state officials. This is a serious position. The federal appeals court is no trivial court, it actually matters. Maybe it's just me, but I think that it might be important to have a law license if you're going to be on the federal appeals court.

Have you had to fill up your gas tank lately? I bet you have, and I bet you have paid close to $2.00 a gallon or more for your gas. Now only an incompetent president would think that the economy is doing great when you are paying over $2.00 a gallon for gas. It is obvious that he does not have to fill up the tank on his limo.

And finally, only an incompetent president would send our troops to die in Iraq without proof that they could harm us in any way, when the enemy we should really be worried about is Al Quida and Bin Laden. Kids are dying in Iraq for no reason. No weapons of mass destruction, no Saddam/Al Quida link, and we have introduced instability in Iraq that may take years or even decades to remedy.

George Bush is an incompetent president, it is hard to identify a single significant success he can call his own.

Caleb Hayes
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gator_in_Ontario Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 02:52 PM
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19. substitute "incompetent"
Edited on Fri Jun-25-04 02:53 PM by gator_in_Ontario
with "impotent"
Then the viagra thing works
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LisaM Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 02:58 PM
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21. Change "serious position" to "serious issue" or "matter"...
I don't think not having a license to practice law is a "position." Can you change it to a different word? Thanks.
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CalebHayes Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 03:02 PM
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22. k, may I ask why?
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LisaM Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 03:06 PM
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23. Well, a position is a stance, a taking of sides...
whereas this guy not having a license to practice law is a hard fact.
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CalebHayes Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 03:07 PM
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24. Sorry, that was a stupid question. I was being dyslexic
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LisaM Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 03:09 PM
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25. Hey, I like your letter!
I just want it to be perfect!
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CalebHayes Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 03:12 PM
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26. yeah, so do I. I knew DU would be my best editor. usally...
I just ask JohnLocke to do it for me. But he has not been online in a while, I'm kinda wondering what is up, with him.

Caleb
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CalebHayes Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jun-25-04 03:51 PM
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27. Thanks a lot every one, I just walked it down to my local paper....
here is my final cut...

The Bush administration is flat out impotent in regards to properly representing what We the People and America stand for. If there is some kind of Viagra for failing and incompetent leaders then it should be administered intraveniously to Bush and Cheney starting immediately. They can't seem to tell us the truth, or even come up with a decent plan for this country or Iraq for that matter. They also constantly flip-flop on issues. 180 degree reversals of policy are commonplace. Let me give you a few examples of how incompetent this administration is:

Thomas B. Griffith, President Bush's nominee for the federal appeals court in Washington, has been practicing law in Utah without a state law license for the past four years, according to Utah state officials. This is a serious matter. The federal appeals court is no trivial court, it actually matters. Maybe it's just me, but I think that it might be important to have a law license if you're going to be on the federal appeals court.

Have you had to fill up your gas tank lately? I bet you have, and I bet you have paid close to $2.00 a gallon or more for your gas. Now only an incompetent president would think that the economy is doing great when you are paying over $2.00 a gallon for gas. It is obvious that he does not have to fill up the tank on his limo.

And finally, only an incompetent president would send our troops to die in Iraq without proof that they could harm us in any way, when the enemy we should really be worried about is Al Quida and Bin Laden. Kids are dying in Iraq for no reason. No weapons of mass destruction, no Saddam/Al Quida link, and we have introduced instability in Iraq that may take years or even decades to remedy.

George Bush is an incompetent president, it is hard to identify a single significant success he can call his own.

Caleb Hayes
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