I need help from the DU community to address my most important letter to the President.

[wundermaus]

I need your help.
This letter must reach the President and convince him to act immediately.
Life on our planet depends on it.
It might already be too late.
But we must try anyway.
Please, help me compose this letter to the president so that we as a species might save life on earth from extinction.
Thank you.

Here is my first rough draft:

Dear Mr. President,

I am writing to you the most important letter I will ever write. It is more
important that any crisis we have ever faced or ever could face. It is more
important than full scale war, national security, or even survival of the human
species. This letter is about the environmental events already under way that will
exterminate all life on this planet. I am now aware (and no doubt you are too,) of
the positive feedback loops of global climate collapse. Mr. President, we are in a
crisis of such magnitude and urgency, that all else is irrelevant and a distraction
to the challenges we now face. Please Mr. President, I implore you, I beg you to
sound the clarion call to the entire world that we must use every thing we have,
everything we know, everything possible and everything impossible to prevent the
annihilation of life on this planet. Within the next 20 to 30 years or less, the
climactic positive feedback loops now underway will forever doom our planet to a
deadly, lifeless inferno. It is a horror beyond horror to think that we humans would be
responsible for killing ever living thing on this planet. Because we as a species are
are uniquely able to comprehend the cause and affects of our actions, it is our duty and our moral imperative to do everything we can, even if it means our species extinction to save our planet from become uninhabitable to life.

When and if other intelligent beings ever do come to visit our planet, we do not
want them to blame us for destroying an oasis of life in a sea of stars. We want
them to think kindly and compassionately of us for saving life on planet earth, even
if we are not there to greet them our selves.

Time is of the essence, Mr. President. this catastrophe unfolds even now. Once we
perceive the existence of climate collapse, it will already be too late. It may
even be too late, now, but we must try everything and anything possible and
impossible to stop this extinction level event. Life is a miracle. As long as there
is life there is hope. Sadly, there may be no hope for our survival, but maybe for the
life that follows us.

God's speed Mr. President, God's Speed.

[NYC_SKP]

1. K/R and two points of advice: Less is more, be concise, and give one example of feedback loops.

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It's the hardest thing to do in writing, to say the most with the fewest words.

But it's very important, you might lose the reader with how much time you spend on the importance of your letter.

I suggest one short sentence about how important this is to you, follow that with the subject in one sentence, irreversible feedback loops.

Then give an example, ie albedo and the icecaps or ocean warming and thawing of solid methane hydrates.

I think we can assume he knows some of the big picture details, so save your words for the key points and I think it will be a more powerful letter.

Good luck!

[wundermaus]

2. excellent suggestions and greatly appreciated.

Thank you for your help, NYC_SKP
Very helpful advice!

[wundermaus]

5. Here is my first revision -

Dear Mr. President,

I am writing to you the most important letter I will ever write. This letter is about climate collapse, a series of environmental events already under way that could possibly exterminate all life on this planet. I am now aware (and no doubt you are too,) of the positive feedback loops like the the clathrate gun, permafrost melt, and albido ice melt on global climate collapse. Mr. President, I implore you, I beg you to sound the clarion call to the entire world that we must use every thing we have, everything we know, everything possible and everything impossible to prevent the destruction of life on this planet.

Within the next 20 to 30 years or less, climactic positive feedback loops now underway will forever doom our planet's atmosphere to a toxic, lifeless inferno. Because we as a species are uniquely able to comprehend the cause and affects of our past, present and future actions, it is our duty and our moral imperative to do everything we can to prevent the obliteration of all life on this planet.

Time is of the essence, Mr. President. this catastrophe unfolds even now. Once these positive feed back loops are in motion, the collapse could be unstoppable. It may already be too late. Sadly, even if we act now, there may be no hope for our survival, but maybe there could be hope for the life forms that follows us.

God's speed Mr. President, God's Speed.

[NYC_SKP]

6. I like it!

My only peeve is a grammatical one:

"Within the next 20 to 30 years or less" should technically read "Within the next 20 to 30 years, if not sooner" or "Within the next 20 to 30 years or fewer".

Use of the word "fewer" versus "less" has a rule that, when broken, makes me twitch.

We use "fewer" it it describes numbers of something. Less time, fewer years.

Nice job!!!

[wundermaus]

9. Thank you so much!

Your comments and advice is greatly appreciated.
I will make those changes!

[aikoaiko]

3. "exterminate all life on this planet" isn't that hyperbole?

Life will be impacted by climate change, but eliminated? All species?

[wundermaus]

4. The positive feedback loops that are in play and coming into play are deadly and irreversible...

I guess it all depends on the data... unlike an opinion.
The more data we get, the worse it looks.
By the time we "know for sure" our goose will be cooked... along with every other living thing on the planet.
I won't be on the planet in 20 to 30 years so it is a mute point for me.
It's what happens after we are gone that will haunt me as i draw my last breaths.

The Arctic Methane Monster's Rapid Rise

Climate Collapse and Near Term Human Extinction
http://www.globalresearch.ca/guy-mcpherson-on-climate-collapse-and-near-term-human-extinction/5386102

[NYC_SKP]

7. It's a subtle but important distinction. It's likely that a lot of life forms will survive.

It's a fair point, maybe there's a better way to say it, like "life as humans have known it" or "most most modern life forms"

Surviving at the very least, I think, would be some bacteria and lichens, viruses and sea critters that don't depend directly on the atmosphere.

Thanks for asking for input!

[wundermaus]

8. btw -

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I noticed this topic sank like a stone.

A topic that supersedes all others.

Denial - One of the attributes of a civilization's collapse.

Easter Island... Roman Empire... but this time (Global Climate Collapse) there may be no redo.

Sort of like flying in a plane until it runs out of gas.

We all know how that turns out.

[NYC_SKP]

10. Remember the term from the Roman Empire, "Bread and Circuses"?

It refers, loosely, to distraction.

Today we might say, "minimum support for WIC and Kardashians", or "barely enough social services but all the NASCAR and NFL you can handle".

Keep them distracted.

This week it's the Tan Suit, Krogers, and I don't know WTF else.

Every day it's something new, meanwhile you and I just shake our heads.