so many articles are poorly written. this article is confusing as heck! do you agree?

[Demovictory9]

best comment following article : Someone please rewrite the story.

Pursuit Driver Dies After Violent Crash in Sherman Oaks

The California Highway Patrol was in pursuit of a vehicle in the San Fernando Valley when it ended in a violent crash in Sherman Oaks.

CHP officers followed the silver colored Honda through the southbound 405 Freeway until the driver exited on Burbank Boulevard.

The driver went into the parking structure of a Target store on Sepulveda Boulevard when he was seen calmly walking away from the store.

The man was then seen running around the streets and reentering the parking structure.

He appeared to have gotten back into his vehicle and driven away.

CHP officers found the vehicle in a violent crash against another vehicle in the Sherman Oaks area.

The pursuit driver's vehicle had crashed into a palm tree at a residence on the corner of Burbank Boulevard and Mammoth Avenue in Sherman Oaks.

The second vehicle was beginning to catch on fire but it was quickly put out.

Several patrol units showed up to the scene as fire officials worked to rescue the pursuit driver from his vehicle.

Fire officials had to remove the roof of the vehicle to try and rescue the pursuit driver.

His condition was not immediately known.

https://www.msn.com/en-us/news/crime/pursuit-driver-dies-after-violent-crash-in-sherman-oaks/ar-AAYmIbx

[bucolic_frolic]

1. They're doing to journalism what they did to shoes

Stripped them of raw materials to speed up the assembly line.

[Demovictory9]

6. They sure are..great analogy

[Yonnie3]

2. Paragraphs are a forgotten art

I see a lot of this sort of reporting on local TV's websites.

The style is what I call "breathless voice over for video."

[chia]

3. "Did A Robot Write This? How AI Is Impacting Journalism"

https://www.forbes.com/sites/nicolemartin1/2019/02/08/did-a-robot-write-this-how-ai-is-impacting-journalism/?sh=2858d2217795

[Igel]

4. "Pursued driver" is, I think, what's needed to make it a lot better.

"Pursuit driver" makes it sound like the driver giving pursuit.

Paragraphs would certainly help.

As for this ... Huh?

The driver went [ drove? ] into the parking structure of a Target store on Sepulveda Boulevard when [ where? ] he was seen calmly walking away from the store.
The man was then seen running around the streets and reentering the parking structure.
He appeared to have gotten back into his vehicle and driven away.

As an aside, I find that many of my sophomores and juniors seriously don't understand grade-level words. Even worse, they assume they can just guess and their guess is as good as anybody else's interpretation. And if they do, they use the Urban Dictionary or whatever Google coughs up. And their spelling is hit or miss.

"Deep seeded." Heard an NPR expert say, "I can say this with the certainty of doubt" today. Aimed for "with certainty" and "without any doubt" and got "the certainty of doubt." The NPR host verbally nodded, "Right, you're so right." Now, I'd have said the same thing, but I'd have been dripping snark while the NPR host either was on the same level or didn't want to say, "What do you mean? That's nonsense."

[Demovictory9]

8. What dod we learn in grade school? Something about the subject agreeing with verb

[SharonAnn]

5. Written offshore? India?

[Demovictory9]

7. Thats a thought

[Skittles]

9. that thought occurred to me too

indeed