So (embarrassingly) I'm trying my hand at poetry...

[backtoblue]

Don't any of you laugh dammit!


He loves to watch the clouds go by
A story in the sky only he understands.
His back on the grass, relaxed and content
I dream of lying with him; this silent man.

[OhNo-Really]

1. Someones in love. Sweet poem. Keep writing

I store mine for frr on poetrypoem.com

[backtoblue]

6. Thank you!

I'm a single dreamer lol. He will come

[backtoblue]

21. For you. OhNo-Really...

There's an actor in charge
Oh-No-Really?!

Aquarius enlightened us
Now we can see the chaos
What the hell happened?
What has become of us?

The elected takes dues
Huge pockets of greed
Weren't we prepared?
Hate is now freed.

Oh-No-Really, they say
Reality must have missed
The freedom to choose what's ugly
A world craving to be pissed.

The children were taken
Mothers without their babe
Seeking protection from oligarchs
From murder. From war. Poor needing saved

But Oh-No-Really, the people overcome
A democracy in peril
Trading anger for being numb

A new day shall rise
The brightness of a million souls
Come together with open hearts
And there shall be no more trolls.


(I have too big an imagination and too much time on my hands lol)

[Xipe Totec]

2. Evocative of the lyrics: The Fool on the Hill

Nicely done.

[backtoblue]

9. Now THAT is a compliment!

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I'm a 90s chick, but I love the Beatles. I just watched an Eric Clapton biography. I didn't realize how close he and George Harrison were! Just a bunch of teenagers playing music

[backtoblue]

14. Here's one especially for you

Come with me, friend
Take hold of my hand
Today I shall show you
Where I write in the sand

To this beach I tell secrets
The things left unsaid
The memories of the forgotten
This story unread

Each word etched in the sand
Each phrase gone with the tide
Hard to come, easy go.
A special place that I hide.


(I'm kinda dark. Hope you like it!)

[CaliforniaPeggy]

3. My dear backtoblue!

I've dabbled myself, and I think this is quite nice.

You might want to take a look at creative writing or poetry courses at your local community college. They can really give you a great start.

Also, READ poetry. I find that reading poets who I enjoy help me get into a poetic frame of mind. One of my big favorites is Todd Boss. Google him and have a look. When I grow up, I want to write like he does!

Yours has a lovely cadence to it. Try reading it out loud and you'll hear it.

There is no need for rhyming!

Best of luck!

[backtoblue]

10. Thanks Peggy!

I read it out loud and I actually FELT it! Sometimes I wish I lived in the city and go to open poetry sessions! I'm an odd bird. I love the beat of hip hop, but I love the words of Emily Dickinson! Yeats is another favorite of mine, as well as others.

We are each of us angels
With only one wing
We can only fly
By holding on to each other


(I read that on a bathroom stall A a music festival)

[backtoblue]

16. A special poem for you...

California, the bright golden sun
Awakens the coastline
Dreams. Possibilities. The west has won.

The hippies, the city
The barefoot soldiers
Redwoods, their soul friends
Made a truce to endure.

To exist. To be breath
To be captured by life
A prisoner to adventure
A passenger on the origin of time.

Peggy, while waiting
An aura of hope
Kindness, respect, and warmth
A bright strand in time's rope

[CaliforniaPeggy]

17. Wow my dear backtoblue, I am so honored.

That is lovely!

(Although, I would use some other word for awakens, the second time, since you already used it.)

But my god, that's gorgeous!

I am very touched.

[backtoblue]

19. I took your advice

You were right! I think I'm going to go spam the writers group now lol

I'm glad you liked it! You really make this place kind and thoughtful. I hope you know how much you are loved here

[CaliforniaPeggy]

20. Thank you again, dear backtoblue!

I've heard about the folks who care......they are very special.

[malthaussen]

34. Girl's got some poetic chops, yass?

And she's "only starting." Gives me faith in the rising generation.

-- Mal

[CaliforniaPeggy]

35. She does!

[UTUSN]

4. Nice!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11

[backtoblue]

11. Hey thanks!

Here's one for you;

From your username my UTUSN
Tennessee whiskey warms the coldest heart
A sip from heaven, the smoothest of rides
I tip my hat and admire thee
From afar I'm warm; my heart doth confides.

[UTUSN]

13. ************WOW*********! I'm overwhelmed! Thank you so much

Here's my nautical one:

I have heard knell
a shipboard bell
the hours on a glass blue sea.

And I have heard yell
sailors, swabbies, and swells
with pitching 'twixt fish and fowl free.

Oft' have had quell'd
my sun sweat smell
by salt spray - bare, burned back to lee.

Have let alone dwell
a green eyed belle
as I skipped to my 'mates with glee.

For I have heard knell
a shipboard bell
the hours on a glass blue sea!

[backtoblue]

15. Awesome!

Reminds me of Dickinson's "Experience"

Im having fun, so humor me!



DU is fun, DU is cool
We're as stubborn and steadfast as a bullheaded mule
We have our fights, we share our concerns
But when we come together-
So many views we have learned!

The tent fits all sizes but we sometimes forget
We welcome the brave travelers:
And settle our debts.

We love the earth, as we share this world
The trees, the waters, the sands, the ice
We respect nature's creatures
Who pay the humans price.

Peace world. I hope we can coexist one sunny day

[skylucy]

5. I love it!

[backtoblue]

7. Thanks! This is my dream man

[backtoblue]

18. And for skylucy...

Darkness lit by fireflies
The day shall rest
The skylucy shines above
Blessing a certain music fest

The twirlers of fire: the singers of heart
The journey embarked upon
A mysterious fresh start.

The sun gives us sight
The clouds are but a muse
When the last ray recedes
There's curiosity to choose

The dance is as one
The rhythm of a thousand feet
Skylucy hums her melody
A million souls meet

One life. One breath to share. The earth as one
A stranger. An alien. An emergance of the dark sun

[skylucy]

26. Oh wow. Now I am even more impressed!

[Cracklin Charlie]

8. Marvelous!

Kinda takes you somewhere nice. I like it!

[backtoblue]

12. I'm a pro at escapism.

A master of nothing lol. I'm trying to write a song that I can play on my guitar. Wednesday night blues...(12bar)

I met me a crackling Charlie
He led me to that hill
I took his hand, I held on tight
I thought this could not be real

I love some Charlie, baby
I need some Charlie, baby
My internet Charlie, baby

Just leave me to beg, I can't trust my own head
I'm blinded by chance
I won't have no romance
Forget all the words I just said

...... Lol hope you like! (And hope it's not weird, I'm in a zone)

I

[Cracklin Charlie]

24. Just weird enough.

But Cracklin Charlie’s a girl, baby!

I’m named after my tiny 4 pound toy poodle. I used to drive her with me to work everyday, and we would listen to the oldies station. At the same point in our drive, every day, Cracklin Rosie by Neil Diamond would play. Charlie became Cracklin Charlie!

She is now 13 years old, and still 4 damn pounds of nasty poodle woman!

Thanks for the song, I love the blues!

[backtoblue]

25. Aww, you have a teeny little friend

I'm so bad at guessing genders. I'm sorry. Alot of DUers think I'm a guy. I will write you a makeup song!

Oh, my sweet Crackling Charlie Lady
Where'd I go so wrong?
Sweet, sweet Charlie Girl
I'm gonna write a new song

How'd you get so cool girl?
Got the blues deep in your soul
You know the blues had a baby
And they called it rock and roll!




My favorite blues singers/players are Otis Redding, Muddy Waters, Etta James, and John Lee hooker

[backtoblue]

22. For Rhiannon (I know you're still up lol)

In between the recesses of time
In the seas beyond the great realm
Rhiannon The Observer was sent to explore
New boats arriving on DU's shore.

She sent for a team, a group with the sight
Appointed by "the elders", to help the good fight

Trolls can be tricky, using mischief and lies
To cause us to fight, to argue, to split
Chaos and hate are the hearts of these souls
They can't pretend long without starting some shit

Spammers are persistent, all day and all night
A legion of sellers want to show off their wares
Bloggers for hire, Indian condos for rent
Internet poker and high dollar time shares

Rhiannon The Observer. Rhiannon The Night Owl
It's been a please to serve with you
MIRT led to a cool new pal!



(This is silly I know. I can't sleep, so DU has to put up with me tonight lol)

[Rhiannon12866]

23. Oh! Thank you so much! That's wonderful! I am truly honored...

And I just wanted you to know what a great asset you've been on MIRT this term. You've showed up - and participated - and were an incredibly quick study! It's been a pleasure to serve with you - and to make a new DU friend!

[red dog 1]

27. A poetic limerick I wrote a couple of years back

There once was a dumb racist phony
Who fed all the people baloney
But he won the election
Using lies and deception
With some help from Putin and Comey


(I like your poem)

[backtoblue]

32. Lol I like it

red dog says no Google for this game
backtoblue gets them wrong cause im lame
Limericks are fun to share
Here, there, and everywhere
I wish I chose a cool username

[lillypaddle]

28. It's very good

Keep writing!

[lillypaddle]

29. try your hand at a Haiku

It's short - and fun, I think. It's 3 lines: 5 - 7 - 5

Here is one I wrote some years ago

The breezes of spring
brush gently the upturned face
a wet kiss of rain


If you decide to give it a go, please share.

[backtoblue]

30. Beautiful!

I think I had to write a haiku in high school lol

Stories told in sand
Tides called to wash it away
Winds tell it aloud


I'm gonna have to practice lol

[lillypaddle]

31. So cool!

Add "the" in front of sand and you got it!

[malthaussen]

33. Naw, not embarrassingly...

... be sure to wash your hands afterwards (I always do), and remember that the best way to say what you want to say is to say it.

Since you're in a romantic mood:

A Thought for Mr Khayyam

The poet Omar wanted only
Wine, a loaf, and thou
To satisfy his hungers
Amidst the endless Now.

But he's a guy, and
Maybe love is not enough for him.
Perhaps he needs distractions
Before he can begin.

But I will lay me down with you
Wherever we may be.
And drink intoxication from
The everlasting We.

***

“Pavlov’s Dog Needs Only One Iteration”


“I hate pizza,” I said, and she smiled
as she held up a wedge to my mouth.
A bite, the cheese and sauce blending
on my tongue; crunch of crust as I chew, then swallow.

A few bites more, and then with mischief in her eyes
she presses her lips to my startled mouth.
Quick flicker of tongue, as she steals a crumb,
a taste cooler than any liquid to wash down
the commingled flavors.

God, I love pizza.

-- Mal