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AZLD4Candidate

(5,659 posts)
Mon Sep 20, 2021, 09:48 PM Sep 2021

I am trying to write my first real story song a la Harry Chapin

The name is "Kensington Beach." Could I have your input to my lyrics? I am writing the music now.

In urban Pennsylvania, there’s a place that no will see
None will bare to listen and none want to creep
Philadelphia has its eagles, but those are out of reach
Especially those of us who live on Kensington Beach

I ending up on Kensington when my luck turned into black
Lost and cold and broken, there was no looking back
I am under a parasol as the junkies start to screech
Living on the concrete on Kensington Beach

My eyes have seen the horrors only found in distant lands
As I lay under the trains on a beach with no sand
Those that pass sneer their lips, the others don’t want to see
If it weren’t for the grace of God, you could also be me

Unless you need to be here, you will never come
Temptation of the market has landed a home for a sum
A prick and then you watch people fold themselves in half
It’s a release that need to escape the pain at hand

Summer time is brutal when you’re lost out on the streets
I’ve watched too many fall and die to escape summer heat
But winter time is wicked
when the cruel wind brings the snow
Here, lost in Kensington, you’ll die before you know

I am the wasted refuse where no one seems to care
Those in charge claim they’ll come, but they don’t even dare
We are the underbelly with one foot in the sand
And no one wants to notice as we are the living dammed

Overture
Am I a human being?
What have I become?
What am doing with my life?
I never planned to be here
I just lost my way
Why am I sliding down this knife?

Watch the reckless
Watch the hopeless
Watch the forgotten
Watch the undead
I am undead
I am not dead!

Wondering where the world went as I look at my harm
Years of self abuse I have jammed into my arm
The women sell the only thing they have in this world
Some are old as the sun, most are little girls

My mind is escaping now.
My pain is erasing now.
I am no different that the people that I see
I will remain a resident of Kensington Beach
I am lost but I feel at home on Kensington Beach

Slow
A toothless man came to me and sat by my side
He said that I was different and why I’m trying to hide
I didn’t care to answer him as put on the strap to tap
A few second later, I would begin to relapse

Once I had a future, as did everybody here
Trauma and life turned for the worse, so we all disappeared
We are different kind of life that no one understands
We are evolved even more than the normal living man

NORMAL
Today I looked in a mirror and saw looking at me
A shell of the person that I knew I used to be
I didn’t recognize myself even though I tried to see
I’m a resident of The Beach, but I needed to flee

I went down an alley sat down and began to cry
This wasn’t what I would make of my life and then wanted to die
But everything in the past is gone and won’t return
All the roads are destroyed and all the bridge burned

I am alone. I am forgotten. I am done.
I hurt myself all the time so I can’t hurt no one
I need to accept myself so I can learn to grow
Accepting what condition so at last, I will know

I am the wasted refuse where no one seems to care
Those in charge claim they’ll come, but they don’t even dare
We are the underbelly with one foot in the sand
And no one notices we are the living dammed
And no one notices we are the living dammed
And no one notices we are the living dammed

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I am trying to write my first real story song a la Harry Chapin (Original Post) AZLD4Candidate Sep 2021 OP
I don't see a story, just a continuous screed of abject hopelessness Beakybird Sep 2021 #1
It's about the Kensington district of Philadelphia AZLD4Candidate Sep 2021 #5
Would like to hear when music/song is done. Hoyt Sep 2021 #2
What I know of Harry Chapin Deuxcents Sep 2021 #3
yes AZLD4Candidate Sep 2021 #4
Good to know Deuxcents Sep 2021 #6
'beached' on Kensington would be stronger imagery of being stranded and hopeless ... Donkees Sep 2021 #7

Beakybird

(3,332 posts)
1. I don't see a story, just a continuous screed of abject hopelessness
Mon Sep 20, 2021, 10:26 PM
Sep 2021

The rhyming and phrasing is very well done. It's just too bleak for my tastes with no humor or irony to varnish it up - unless I'm missing something.
I'm just one soul giving a perspective. If you hear the same from several others and a dearth of people connecting to your verses, then I would simply see these lyrics as a therapeutic vehicle. 🌺❤️

Deuxcents

(16,157 posts)
3. What I know of Harry Chapin
Mon Sep 20, 2021, 11:21 PM
Sep 2021

We have a full throttle food bank here in SW Florida n the community is all in. Grocery stores, drop offs, warehouses n they work with our many vegetable farms. Is this the same Harry Chapin?

Deuxcents

(16,157 posts)
6. Good to know
Tue Sep 21, 2021, 12:24 AM
Sep 2021

Maybe your relationship was one that is not what we know. Of course it’s embellished. Your song is not the one people sing here. Hope that’s a good thing..

Donkees

(31,366 posts)
7. 'beached' on Kensington would be stronger imagery of being stranded and hopeless ...
Tue Sep 21, 2021, 09:52 AM
Sep 2021

Maybe start the lyrics with the second stanza. Instead of 'I am under a parasol' use shadow or shade imagery (?)

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