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And again...
hawk shadow
blue jays go silent
suddenly
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I took the liberty of rearranging it a bit. See what you think. My thoughts are below.
hawk shadow
suddenly
blue jays go silent
I rearranged it so it would flow more easily. And I like the ambiguity of putting suddenly in the middle.
Your poem is full of vivid images and is strong!
