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Thu May 14, 2020, 02:17 AM

One more for today. Still no title.

Lying in our bed alone
Your touch too far to reach
Memories washed over me
Like waves upon the beach

First lapping at the edges
And then crashing to the ground
The swirling tides of yesterday
Left me almost drowned

And I was falling
Twisted by the surf
Couldn’t find the place
Between heaven and the earth
Running out of air
Reaching toward the light
Almost didn’t care
If I’d lost the will to fight

The tears, they left me breathless
Like the rolling, crashing waves
Clinging to some memory
Of more idyllic days

The tide, you know, it ebbs and flows
But never looks for fault
It cleans away the sharpest pain
But leaves a trace of salt

And I was falling
Crashing through the surf
Couldn’t find the place
Between heaven and the earth
And the rippled sea of life
Even after all these years
Baptizes me with memories
And tastes vaguely of your tears.

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Reply One more for today. Still no title. (Original post)
Tucker08087 May 2020 OP
Alliepoo May 2020 #1
Tucker08087 May 2020 #2
Star-Thrower Aug 2020 #3
Tucker08087 Aug 2020 #4
Tucker08087 Aug 2020 #5

Response to Tucker08087 (Original post)

Thu May 14, 2020, 08:23 AM

1. Love it!

Would be a great song!

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Response to Alliepoo (Reply #1)

Thu May 14, 2020, 10:57 AM

2. Thank you!

It may go in that direction, but I haven’t written music yet.

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Response to Tucker08087 (Original post)

Sat Aug 1, 2020, 08:12 PM

3. How about this for a title

And I was falling.

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Response to Star-Thrower (Reply #3)

Sat Aug 1, 2020, 11:51 PM

4. I like it!

Maybe just “Falling”?

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Response to Tucker08087 (Reply #4)

Sun Aug 23, 2020, 07:28 AM

5. I've decided on a title

I was nominated and accepted into an international poetry challenge from India! And I need to send. 8 pieces of that poetry AND creative photos of me, which makes me a bit uncomfortable,
But they all need titles. I went with
The Place Between

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