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Thu May 28, 2020, 09:25 PM

Drowning in Grief

? Maybe as a title?

Very personal and I think itís pretty. I live on the coast, so I find I often use salt water imagery.


Lying in our bed alone
Your touch-
Your touch too far to reach
Memories of we
Wash over me
Like waves rolling on the beach

First theyíre lapping at my edges
Then Iím crashing to the ground
The swirling tides of yesterday
Left me-
Left me almost drowned

And I was falling
Twisting and tumbling in the surf
Couldnít find the place between heaven
Between heaven
And the earth

The darkness of pain was suffocating
Looking up and searching for the light
Almost didnít care
If I ran out of air
Iíd lost
Iíd lost the will to fight

The tears, they left me breathless
Like the rolling crashing of the waves
Clinging to some picture perfect fantasy
Of more idyllic days

And I was falling
Twisting and crashing through the surf
Couldnít find the place between heaven
Between heaven
And the earth

The tide, you know
It ebbs and flows
But never looks for fault
Washes away
The pain of yesterday
But leaves
Leaves the taste of salt

And the rippled sea of life
Even after all these years
Baptizes me
With seasoned memories
Tasting vaguely of my tears

And I was falling
Tumbling and crashing through the surf
Couldnít find the place between heaven
Between heaven
And the earth

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Tucker08087 May 2020 OP
42bambi May 2020 #1
Tucker08087 May 2020 #4
SaveOurDemocracy May 2020 #2
Tucker08087 May 2020 #3
SaveOurDemocracy May 2020 #5
SaveOurDemocracy May 2020 #6
Blue Montana Jul 2020 #7
Tucker08087 Jul 2020 #8

Response to Tucker08087 (Original post)

Thu May 28, 2020, 09:31 PM

1. From deep within you have a place you share with us ... nice.

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Response to 42bambi (Reply #1)

Thu May 28, 2020, 10:23 PM

4. Thank you.

Yes, this one is raw. Itís definitely coming from deep within my soul.

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Response to Tucker08087 (Original post)

Thu May 28, 2020, 09:59 PM

2. I think this is very beautiful and evocative. The imagery and emotion captivated me.

'Memories of We' could be a nice title, a little more subtle than 'Drowning in Grief', which is seen and felt throughout the poem. Only you know what it should be named.

Thank you for sharing with us. Peace and love to you.

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Response to SaveOurDemocracy (Reply #2)

Thu May 28, 2020, 10:19 PM

3. Thank you for reading!

I think youíre right. Iíll try to find a more subtle title.

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Response to Tucker08087 (Reply #3)

Thu May 28, 2020, 10:36 PM

5. It was my pleasure, though bittersweet.

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Response to Tucker08087 (Original post)

Thu May 28, 2020, 10:37 PM

6. K&R

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Response to Tucker08087 (Original post)

Wed Jul 1, 2020, 03:55 PM

7. Thank you for sharing your feelings and your art...

That's some fine word-smithing. I truly appreciate your honest approach and your flow is very easy to follow. Thank you very much for sharing your fine artwork. It was a pleasure.

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Response to Blue Montana (Reply #7)

Thu Jul 16, 2020, 05:20 AM

8. Thank you so much!

I truly appreciate a small audience of thoughtful, intelligent critics.

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