2016 Postmortem
In reply to the discussion: With All Due Respect, this man truly should be our president! [View all]senz
(11,945 posts)Your initiative and creativity in searching around, finding it, and giving it serious thought is inspiring, KoKo.
I agree with you that #12 should be up front because it sums up Bernie's overall goal and lets people know where he's coming from. And though I respect and admire your consideration for the blogger's preference, if and when you make your own pamphlet, you wouldn't need to align it perfectly with theirs. If you wanted to credit them, you could say something like, "based on."
It's a good idea to examine each point before using it, because there is at least one glaring error in the blogger's list. #5 - "Educational reform including Free Tuition to all Universities" is untrue. Bernie calls for free tuition to all public colleges/universities. Imposing that rule on private institutions is illegal and would probably make Bernie sound like a nut.
The language in #6 could be better. "Straying away" is really weak. "Reducing" would be an improvement, and there may be an even better verb than that. (I have always had difficulty with language and so learned early on to love thesauruses http://www.thesaurus.com/browse/reduce ).
#8 needs a better explanation. There's a lot more to it than that.
Lists like these should be as brief and to the point as possible. It's important how a candidate is introduced to those who aren't familiar with him/her. That's why I wish the Sanders campaign would come up with their own list and make it available to the rest of us. It requires communication specialists, experts, pros, if it's to be done well.
But until they do, a list like this is very good and a great start. And I think Bernie is fortunate to have you on his side, KoKo.