Poetry

Tucker08087

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9. Thank you!

Wed Mar 4, 2020, 01:03 AM

Mar 2020

I am kind of partial to that stanza myself!
I also like the ending...

But I’m not God.
Good Lord!
Don’t even play Him on TV!

I want to kind of speak, with exaggeration, “Good Lord!”

In the chorus, I tried to change whatever came after “I’m not perfect, but certainly I try” or whatever variation I used, and I really struggled because I wanted to write “I drink and I get high” just because it’s different, but I actually don’t get high and my mom (who’s about 80) likes to listen to my songs, and I couldn’t do it to her! 💕

Thanks so much for the feedback! I have other song lyrics that I recently posted if interested. I turn off from every form of media and write something every night. It keeps me sane!

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Would love help with a title for this! [View all] Tucker08087 Mar 2020 OP

I don't know who your intended audience is, and I... 3catwoman3 Mar 2020 #1

Thank you! Tucker08087 Mar 2020 #5

Also, Tucker08087 Mar 2020 #11

Well, I am not a singer, although I like to sing when no one... 3catwoman3 Mar 2020 #12

I'll try. Tucker08087 Mar 2020 #13

Tough to name someone else's work, but... Wounded Bear Mar 2020 #2

Good ideas! Tucker08087 Mar 2020 #6

Great song! FM123 Mar 2020 #3

Thank you! Tucker08087 Mar 2020 #7

Don't forget to post a video of the song once you finish laying down the tracks FM123 Mar 2020 #8

I will! Tucker08087 Mar 2020 #10

I don't know but this is my favorite verse lunasun Mar 2020 #4

Thank you! Tucker08087 Mar 2020 #9

I wanted one of the refrains to say... Tucker08087 Mar 2020 #14

You could change from curse and cry? lunasun Mar 2020 #15

My doctor is in Philly and did prescribe it. Tucker08087 Mar 2020 #16

I plan to do more writing while self-quarantined. Tucker08087 Mar 2020 #17

++Sometimes when people are cooped up it clears the air of other distractions and makes lunasun Mar 2020 #19

I like it. Tucker08087 Mar 2020 #18

How about simply... Tucker08087 Mar 2020 #20

Message auto-removed Name removed Apr 2020 #21

Lol! Tucker08087 Apr 2020 #22

My suggestion:"It's not me, its you." nilesobek Apr 2020 #23

I kinda like the title of Star-Thrower Aug 2020 #24

Maybe "Can I Help You?" islandbrew Aug 2020 #25

Almost like a response to "a Karen?" Tucker08087 Aug 2020 #26